Writing P&W Songs? Me?

I've never done this before, never even attempted it. I've tried to write some poetry with a Christain slant, but I'm such a poetry snob, and yet so concerned with being 1000% true to the Word of God, that I got nowhere. I found it hard to be poetically inventive while trying to stick to the facts. I know it's possible, but I gave up quickly.

Writing worship songs would be easier, I think, because I'm not a music snob, and Praise and Worship songs should be 1000% true to the Word of God. But I don't write music, so I've never attempted this.

Until today.

I have a husband now who can play and write music. I am a writer with a penchant for words. Doesn't this mean that the two of us working together could write P&W?

I took a Psalm today that was very special to me during a period of time at college which I refer to as the Dark Ages. I don't remember a good block of time my sophomore year--all I remember was a time of darkness. I got sick that semester for about a week, and that is why I remember it as dark; the lights were out and the blinds shut all week so I could sleep. It was in this week (maybe longer, since I can't remember this whole block of time hardly at all) that I spend countless hours weeping and questioning the point of my faith and crying out to God for myself and for others and searching the Scriptures for help... and I came across several Psalms that spoke right into my heart. Psalm 13 was one of them:

How long, O LORD ? Will you forget me forever?
How long will you hide your face from me?

How long must I wrestle with my thoughts
and every day have sorrow in my heart?
How long will my enemy triumph over me?

Look on me and answer, O LORD my God.
Give light to my eyes, or I will sleep in death;

my enemy will say, "I have overcome him,"
and my foes will rejoice when I fall.

But I trust in your unfailing love;
my heart rejoices in your salvation.

I will sing to the LORD,
for he has been good to me.
[NIV](I usually prefer the ESV but I didn't notice which translation I was using until after I finished.)

So anyway. Today I attempted to write out a P&W song after this passage. I'm being very vulnerable here in posting it, since as I've said, I have never done this before, and I'm not terribly confident. It has no music yet, of course, but perhaps if it passes the first test of Biblical accuracy and the second test of lyrical fluity, then music will be added.

Those are the two systems by which I ask you to critique this song: Accuracy and Fluity.

*Heavy Sigh....*

Go. [ blush]


PSALM 13

VERSE 1:
How long, oh Lord, will You forget me?
Will You forget me forever?
How long, oh Lord, will You hide from me?
Will Your face be hid forever?

BRIDGE:
Look on me and answer!
You are the Lord my God.
Give light to my unseeing eyes
Or I will surely die.

CHORUS:
In your unfailing love
I pledge my soul to trust;
my heart rejoices in your salvation.
You have been good to me!
Unto the Lord I sing.
My heart rejoices in your salvation.

VERSE 2:
How long must I wrestle with my thoughts?
My thoughts are hard and heavy.
How long must sorrow fill my heart?
Every day my heart is heavy.

BRIDGE
CHORUS


[ /blush]


If you don't like this one, maybe you'll like my other one:

CHORUS:
You're good, You're cool, You're awesome,
Oh yeah. (repeat 3x)

BRIDGE:
Oh yeah, oh yeah,
You're cool and awesome and good.